Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean island over an eight-year period from 2010 to 2017, categorised into those staying on cruise ships and those staying on the island itself, as well as the total number of visitors.
Overall, the total number of tourists visiting the island experienced a steady upward trend throughout the period, more than doubling from approximately 1 million to over 3.5 million. While visitors staying on the island initially outnumbered cruise ship visitors, the latter eventually surpassed the former and became the dominant category by the end of the period.
In 2010, the total number of tourists stood at around 1 million, with visitors staying on the island accounting for the majority at approximately 0.75 million, compared to only about 0.25 million cruise ship visitors. Over the next two years, both categories grew gradually, with island-based visitors reaching roughly 1.25 million in 2012, while cruise ship visitors increased to about 0.75 million during the same period.
From 2012 onwards, a notable divergence occurred. Island-based visitor numbers continued to rise steadily, peaking at approximately 1.75 million in 2015, before experiencing a slight decline to around 1.5 million in 2017. In contrast, cruise ship visitors experienced a more dramatic increase, overtaking island-based visitors in 2016 and reaching a peak of approximately 2 million in 2017. Consequently, the total number of visitors rose significantly, climbing from about 1.5 million in 2012 to a peak of roughly 3.5 million in 2017.
Why this answer scores Band 7.0:
| Criteria | How the sample meets Band 7.0 requirements |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement | Addresses all key features: overall trend, comparison between the two categories, and specific data points. Provides a clear overview and highlights the crossover point when cruise ship visitors surpassed island-based visitors. |
| Coherence & Cohesion | Clear paragraph structure: introduction → overview → body paragraphs with logical chronological flow. Uses a range of cohesive devices effectively: Overall, While, In contrast, Consequently, From 2012 onwards. |
| Lexical Resource | Good range of vocabulary: illustrates, categorised into, experienced a steady upward trend, outnumbered, surpassed, accounted for the majority, notable divergence, dramatic increase, peaked. Avoids repetition of basic words. |
| Grammatical Range & Accuracy | Uses a mix of simple and complex sentences effectively. Good use of comparative structures (compared to, outnumbered, surpassed), participles (climbing from), and time expressions (over the next two years, from 2012 onwards). Minor errors only. |
What holds this back from Band 7.5:
| Issue | Explanation |
|---|---|
| Vocabulary could be more varied | While adequate, phrases like "steadily upward trend" and "grew gradually" could be more precise. Band 7.5+ might use "consistent upward trajectory" or "exhibited sustained growth." |
| Some repetition of numbers | The figures are reported clearly but could be varied with more approximation language (just over, marginally above, approximately used sparingly). |
| Data grouping could be more sophisticated | The essay groups data chronologically, which is effective, but Band 7.5+ might identify more nuanced patterns (e.g., "the gap between the two categories narrowed significantly after 2015"). |
| Grammar could be more complex | While there are complex sentences, Band 7.5+ would include more varied structures (e.g., inverted conditionals, more sophisticated relative clauses). |
How to improve this to Band 7.5+:
| Weak version (Band 7.0) | Stronger version (Band 7.5+) |
|---|---|
| "The total number of tourists experienced a steady upward trend." | "The total number of visitors exhibited a consistent upward trajectory throughout the period, more than tripling by the final year." |
| "Visitors staying on the island accounted for the majority." | "Island-based tourists constituted the overwhelming majority, outnumbering cruise ship visitors by a factor of three." |
| "Cruise ship visitors experienced a more dramatic increase." | "Cruise ship visitors underwent a more pronounced surge, overtaking their island-based counterparts in 2016." |
| "The total number of tourists stood at around 1 million." | "The aggregate figure stood at approximately 1 million, with a clear disparity between the two visitor categories." |
Quick checklist for Band 7.0 Task 1:
Clear introduction paraphrasing the task
Overview paragraph highlighting key trends
Accurate data reported with approximations
Comparisons made between categories
Logical paragraph structure
Range of linking words
Adequate vocabulary (not too basic)
Mix of simple and complex sentences
At least 150 words (ideally 170-190)
Few grammatical errors
Key tips for Band 7.0+ in line graph tasks:
Start with a clear overview – Summarise the overall trend and the most significant comparison before going into details.
Highlight the crossover point – When two lines cross, this is always a key feature worth mentioning.
Use a range of trend vocabulary:
Increase: rise, climb, grow, surge, increase, peak
Decrease: fall, drop, decline, decrease, plummet
Stable: remain steady, level off, plateau
Use approximation language:
approximately, roughly, nearly, just over, just under, around, about
Compare clearly:
outnumbered, surpassed, exceeded, was higher/lower than, in contrast to
Comparison: Band 6.5 vs 7.0 (same task)
| Aspect | Band 6.5 | Band 7.0 (this sample) |
|---|---|---|
| Vocabulary | went up, went down, more than | experienced a steady upward trend, surpassed, accounted for the majority, notable divergence |
| Overview | Simple summary | Clear overview with key comparisons |
| Comparisons | Basic | Sophisticated (eventually surpassed, in contrast, consequently) |
| Grammar | Some complex sentences | Good variety with few errors |
| Data accuracy | Some vague reporting | Precise with appropriate approximations |
Band Score 5The line chart illustrates how many tourists were visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. Overall, it is clear that the tourist who stayed on island recorded the highest number in the first year, while who were staying on cruise ships remained the lowest number in the beginning of the period. In 2010 to 2011, the visitors on island stayed the same around 0.7 million, on the other hand, there was a significant increased in tourists who stayed on cruise ships from 0.3 to 0.5 million. The figure of visitors on island showed a rise approximately 1.5 million in 2015, followed by 1.3 million visitors on ships. By 2016, the number of tourists on cries ships continued grow, at 1.5 million, while the visitors staying on island slightly decline around 1.3 then rose to 1.5 in 2017. It can be seen that the total had rise until 2016 around 2.3 million then suddenly grow sharply to 3.5 visitors in 2017.
Band Score 5The line graph provides information about the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbrean island between 2010 and 2017. Overall, it can be seen that the total number is the highest visited in Caribbrean at beginning with in later year. And the lowest on cruise ships at starting year to last year, while the staying on island is mid prefered, but it has crossed with cruise ship. In 2011, one million of visitors are visited in Caribbrean with total which is high preferred by visitors. Then it was proportion built in last year with 3.5 visitors, while the mid favourite is in island starting from 0.6 then it was fluctuate conditions with grew in 2013 with 1.5, suddenly from 2013 to 2015 it was stable with 1.6. On other hands, compared to total and islands, the cruise ships was less prefered by visitors which is lowest with 0.2, where as from 2012 visitors liked the cruise with 0.3 to at later 2 millions of visitors approved. Although the cruise ships overtaking with on islands from 2015 to 2017 with 1.4 to 2 then cruise have most preferred transport for visitors at later.
Band Score 6The line graph depicts the number of tourists that visited Caribbean Island between the years 2010 and 2017. Overall, the graph shows that visitors staying on cruise ships were least compared to the ones who stayed on island. It is evident that visitors who stayed on cruise ships combined with those who stayed on island were fewer than the total number of people that were on the Caribbean island. Vistors who used cruise ships as shelters experienced some fluctuations from 2010 to 2012 starting at around 0.2 and remaining constant, later on in 2013 up to 2017 there was a sharp increase to 2 million visitors. In contrast, people who settled at island had a slight increase from nearly 0.7 million to approximately 1.2 million in 2016. Then a slight increase was experienced to 1.5 million in 2017. The total number of visitors rose significantly throughout the period; it started at 1 million and ended up at 3,5 million in 2017. In conclusion, visitors on cruise ships declined in 2016 whereas on island remained increasing.
Band Score 6The line graph illustrates the amount of tourists visiting a certain Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. Overall, the total number of visitors, wither staying on cruise ships or locating on an island itself , has rose through out the years. The amount of individuals who chose to stay on cruise ships increased dramatically over the period of time, initially, in 2010 there were hardly 0.25 million, before it rose and reached its peak in 2017, with 2 millions visitor. on the other hand, the number of tourists staying on island fluctuated, starting with about 0.75 mil in 2010, before is rose to 1.5 mil and it steadied from 2012 to 2015 then faced a slight decline to 1.25, However, in 2017 it rose back to 1.5 mil, double addition to its starting figure in 2010. meanwhile, the total visitors on both cruise ships and islands were 3.5 mil, which means that tourists staying on island makes less than half the number in comparisons with tourists on cruise ships.
Band Score 6The line chart illustrates data of a specific Caribbean island visitors during the period of seven years, between 2010 and 2017. Overall, it is clear from the graph that the numbers individuals who stayed on cruise ship increased dramatically over the period of time, conversely the figures of island visitors fluctuated throughout the time frame. While, total counts of visitors continuously increased sharply. Initially, in 2010 the visitors who stayed on cruise ships were one fourth of total visitors, however post to a slight decline in 2012 to its lowest around 0.25 million , it hits back and reached its peak at 2017 to 2 million visitors. In comparison, as the total number of visitors surged , visitors staying on the island saw an unusual pattern leading to 1.5 million visitors in 2017 with double addition to its starting figures. In conclusion, the visitors staying on cruise ships were far beyond its 2010's value crossing its counterpart visitors site in the end.